Also, I wrote a first piece of story. It's supposed to be a in-universe historical tale, not a legitimate story set in Shifting World. I was inspired by Wolfram von Eschenbach's Parzival, which I was reading last weekend. I was aiming for a similar style to that of Parzival and other medieval tales translated into modern prose. Needless to mention, I'm sure I failed (I am speaking Modern German and try to write a Middle German story in Middle English modernized into Modern English. For fuck's sake, I never even read Shakespeare in the Klingon Elizabethan English original). It's on the wiki here, so you're invited to improve it and weed out the anachronistic etymologies. It's full of embellishments (Alfreyd's power level and character is blatant anti-mage propaganda, for example, and what about that bit about a dragon?).
A bit I couldn't place (because the character doesn't appear) is about Tjorgin's Tallfellow companion. 'Tallfellow' is the dwarven term for a human-dwarven hybrid (humans would call them 'halflings', maybe?). The author is supposed to speak out against claims that hybrids are soulless and stating that if it walks like a duck and quacks like a duck and is made of wood, it's a duck. With this I wanted to showcase what our soul pentachotomy and the existence of hybrids might lead to in animalogy, theology and society.
Also I'm sorry for being so unimaginative with the name of the sword.
How exactly did the unification happen? Did the British call for help from the French against the pirates? Did they submit to the Frankish king or was it just a military alliance? Edit: Has the Commonwealth a strong central monarch/government or is it a Federation?
I'm not sure what to think of the dwarfism(heh) of the British dwarves.
Post by brandonl337 on Oct 5, 2011 13:57:43 GMT -5
oi vey, don't you guys think we should maybe keep it simple to start?
for instance, the idea of long range magic being summoning something that does what you want at a range. this seems needlessly complicated, just have the mage throw a fireball, alternativley, you could have something where long range is harder, most mages can lift a rock, but very few can tear down a building.
"...when two opposite points of view are expressed with equal intensity, the truth does not necessarily lie exactly halfway between them. It is possible for one side to be simply wrong." Richard Dawkins
What is a fireball? What fuels it and keeps it burning during transit?
If a mage were to create a self-sustaining object and throw it, that is an option, but shaping materials out of thin air isn't exactly the easiest of exercises. A three-task spellmind has no baggage, nothing not directly serving its purpose.
I don't know about you, John E (it's your pet state, after all), but this or something similar pleases me. It's big and unwieldy, it represents the odd origin of the state, and most people will abbreviate it to 'France'.
Remains the question whether it's supposed to be a republic, or a monarchy.