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Post by Admiral Lithp on Jun 29, 2009 5:59:49 GMT -5
You'll never believe this, but as of Monday, 7 AM, June 29th, 2009, EST, I have finally begun following up on this thread, & editing the story.
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Post by HarleyThomas1002 on Jul 1, 2009 19:09:41 GMT -5
if you're still looking for a title you could always call it Title Pending. It'll keep the readers guessing as to what it's about.
Hell, I started writing a story and for some reason I called it "Shining Moon" and as far as I know the story will have nothing to do with the moon. And the title sounds quite fantasyish and the story isn't anything close to being fantasy unless you count it taking place in the year 2010 maybe 2011.
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Post by Admiral Lithp on Jul 18, 2009 6:37:10 GMT -5
So, I've been editing the Prologue, but I don't want to put it up JUST yet. I still think it needs a little touching up.
However, in the meantime, I have another problem: There are 4 main antagonists. I have 3 of them pretty well fleshed out, but the 4th one, I've just never figured out what I want him to do. And, by that, I mean how I want him to fight. I'm also sort of drawing a blank on what he should look like.
The group is based around the 4 horsemen of the apocalypse (sans horses). Death, pestilence, & war are already covered, so he'd be the fourth (from what I've read, that one's less clear). He's also pretty much a tool. He's a cultist, & he sides with pretty much everything the main antagonist does, on account of thinking he's God. So, he comes across as less "evil," & more "brainwashed."
I believe that covers the relevant details.
Anyway, I'm just seeing if anyone has ideas that can help.
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Post by Hades on Jul 18, 2009 11:31:58 GMT -5
Four horsemen, eh? Nice.
I don't know how long of a title you're looking for. But if it isn't too long, I think "Lifting the veil" sounds good. That's what apocalypse means.
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Post by Admiral Lithp on Jul 18, 2009 13:24:49 GMT -5
Thanks.
Really? Huh. I might use that, actually....
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Post by Admiral Lithp on Aug 12, 2009 2:49:14 GMT -5
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Post by m52nickerson on Aug 12, 2009 9:03:07 GMT -5
The link goes to the story section. Which one is yours?
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Post by Sigmaleph on Aug 12, 2009 14:09:22 GMT -5
Keys to Chaos should be the one. Reading it at the moment.
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Post by Admiral Lithp on Aug 12, 2009 14:56:57 GMT -5
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Post by Hades on Aug 12, 2009 18:21:17 GMT -5
I'll hold my opinion until I read more. I feel like I'm missing something. In that thread, you keep saying you have chapters added. But where are they added? I only see the prologue in your first post, and no new content in any following posts except replies to other people.
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Post by Admiral Lithp on Aug 12, 2009 18:42:45 GMT -5
I'll hold my opinion until I read more. I feel like I'm missing something. In that thread, you keep saying you have chapters added. But where are they added? I only see the prologue in your first post, and no new content in any following posts except replies to other people. Okay, here's the story behind that: Originally, I just had a link on that topic, much like this one. The actual story was elsewhere, on that AQF place I sometimes rant about. Because they are retarded, they decided to do a forum wipe while I was mother fucking banned. Fortunately, I had the foresight to have the story on Word. So, there is more, I just haven't gone through the process of re-editing it like I did with the prologue. Mostly, that's because I feel as though I've hit a wall in the editing process, & can't really do anything without outside opinions.
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Post by HarleyThomas1002 on Aug 12, 2009 18:45:57 GMT -5
You could always make a story blog. Not entirely sure how you'd go about do that but a friend of mine did that and it seems to work for her.
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Post by m52nickerson on Aug 12, 2009 20:58:00 GMT -5
Not bad at all. The descriptions may be slightly lacking, but I would continue reading.
As for a title, I was thinking "Come and See".
In revelations after each seal is opened a beast says "come and see" before each of the horsemen are described.
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Post by Sigmaleph on Aug 12, 2009 23:56:06 GMT -5
It's very creepy-mood-setting. If that's what you were going for.
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Post by Admiral Lithp on Aug 13, 2009 1:39:36 GMT -5
Okay, so now that the internet seems to be done being a dick, here's what's up with the lack of additional chapters: They exist. On Word. Previously, that forum just had a link, as well, but the place it originally linked to got deleted during a forum wipe. Fortunately, I had the foresight to have a copy of everything in Word.
Thing is, I haven't gone through the process of re-editing them, yet.
This is one thing I'm concerned about. It seems like I either don't have enough, or they're too wordy.
Also, that suggestion might fit in with something that happens later on. Hmm....
For this part? Yes.
Now that business has been attended to, thank you to everyone who commented. Except Harley. Fuck you.
Just kidding.
...Or am I?
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